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Title: Thankless
Author: Rusty Armour
Character: McKay, O'Neill, Sheppard
Summary: While visiting Atlantis, O'Neill learns that respect is something that definitely has to be earned.
Word Count: 1,972
Category: General
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Rising, Critical Mass, McKay and Mrs. Miller, The Return, Tao of Rodney, Adrift, Lifeline, Reunion
Disclaimer: Thou Shalt Not Steal. Even in the interest of fic. Most of these characters aren't mine. I, uh, borrowed them. Yeah.
Author's Note: After re-watching "The Return," I was struck once again by the fact that O'Neill seemed disrespectful of both McKay and his abilities. While I realize O'Neill was probably joking when he told Weir that she should bring Carter next time instead, it still sounded a bit mean. Anyway, after the episode, I had this overwhelming urge to read a story in which this issue was addressed. However, after a long fruitless search, I had come up with precious little in the way of fic. That was when I decided to take a stab at writing something myself.

This story is set shortly after "Reunion".




When O'Neill and McKay reached the jumper bay, they found Sheppard sitting against one of the puddle-jumpers, throwing a tennis ball against the wall. He stood up as soon as he heard footsteps, staring at O'Neill and McKay in surprise.

"I need to borrow a puddle-jumper," O'Neill said. "I'm taking McKay on a little trip to Earth."

Sheppard almost blanched. "But I thought he was just quitting the team! He didn't say anything about leaving Atlantis!"

O'Neill lifted his hands placatingly. "Whoa. Calm down, Sheppard. He's coming back." He glanced at McKay for affirmation, but McKay was staring fixedly at the ground. O'Neill sighed. "His niece is sick, so he wants to call to check up on her."

"Madison's sick?" Sheppard grasped McKay by the shoulders, and McKay was forced to look at him. "Why didn't you tell me?"

McKay shrugged. "There was that thing with the snake, and-and you were a jerk, and I was pissed off at you, and then I was off the team."

"Rodney, I don't care if Atlantis is crashing down around our ears: if something is wrong with Madison, Jeanie or Kaleb, you tell me." Sheppard smiled and gently smacked McKay on the forehead. "Well, if you're going to Earth by puddle-jumper, you're going to need a pilot."

"He's got a pilot," O'Neill said. "Me."

Sheppard's hands dropped from McKay's shoulders. "With all due respect, sir, I think I should fly the puddle-jumper."

O'Neill raised an eyebrow. "Oh, and why is that, Colonel?"

Sheppard didn't back down. "I have more experience flying puddle-jumpers than you do, sir."

"Then maybe it's time I got in some more practice," O'Neill said.

Sheppard sighed. "Sir, you could practise your piloting skills just as easily in the Pegasus Galaxy, but flying to the Midway Space Station…"

O'Neill cupped a hand to his ear. "I'm sorry, but could you repeat that? For one crazy second, I thought you said you didn't think I could fly a puddle-jumper to the Midway Space Station."

Sheppard opened his mouth to answer then whirled around when he heard the familiar sound of a puddle-jumper engine.

"Are you guys coming or not, eh?" McKay called from the cockpit.

O'Neill and Sheppard exchanged a quick glance then ran through the jumper hatch.

In the end, O'Neill got to fly the jumper because he outranked Sheppard and the phone was in his office. However, as he was in a fairly generous mood, he said he would consider letting Sheppard fly the jumper back to Atlantis.

"Well, I'm sure you'd like some privacy," O'Neill said to McKay once they were all standing in his office.

McKay looked positively panic-stricken. "You're-you're leaving me? But what if-if…"

Sheppard patted McKay's back. "Of course we're not leaving. We'll stay as long as you like." He gazed at O'Neill pleadingly, and O'Neill nodded.

"Sure. What the hell." O'Neill took McKay by the elbow and guided him to the chair behind his desk. "You might as well be comfortable," he explained when McKay stared at him questioningly.

"Uh, thanks," McKay said. Then he started dialling his sister's number. O'Neill was surprised when McKay activated the speakerphone, and a woman's voice filtered into the room.

"Hello?"

McKay's lips twitched into a smile. "Hi, Jeanie."

"Mer?" the voice asked, sounding groggy. "What time is it?"

"I have no idea," McKay said. "Uh, did I wake you?"

"Kind of. I guess I dozed off. Could you hold on for a second?"

McKay nodded, even though Jeanie couldn't see him. "Yes, of course."

About a minute later, Jeanie returned to the phone. "Sorry about that. I just wanted to check on Madison."

"Ah, yes," McKay said. "That's why I called. I was wondering if, uh, Madison's okay." McKay was clutching the desk in a white-knuckled grip, and O'Neill could see that Sheppard was holding his breath.

"Oh my God! Mer, I'm so sorry! I meant to email you! Yes, Maddy should be fine. She's got scarlet fever, but the doctor put her on antibiotics and says she should be better in a couple of days."

Sheppard heaved a sigh of relief, but McKay was still gripping the desk.

"Scarlet fever?" McKay said. "But haven't kids died from that?"

Jeanie laughed. "Yeah, like, a hundred years ago."

McKay glared at the phone. "But you were freaking out. I know you were. It may have just been through email, but I could still tell."

"Well, yes, of course I was freaking out," Jeanie said. "She's my daughter."

McKay shook his head. "No, you were really freaking out. Mom never used to act like that when one of us got sick."

There was a pause on the other end of the phone. "Mer, that was because Mom was a bitch."

McKay looked at O'Neill and Sheppard and blushed. "Oh. Right."

"Where are you calling from?" Jeanie asked. "Are you back on Earth?"

O'Neill shot a stunned look at the phone, but then Sheppard leaned towards him and said, "It's okay. Jeanie's got clearance."

"Mer, is someone there with you?" Jeanie asked. "I thought I heard a voice in the background."

McKay smiled at the phone nervously. "I'm here with General O'Neill and Sheppard."

There was an even longer pause on the other end this time before Jeanie said, "Please tell me you're not on speakerphone."

"Uh…"

"Meredith!"

McKay put his head in his hands and groaned.

O'Neill turned to Sheppard quickly. "Did she just call him Meredith?"

Sheppard grinned. "Yep. That's his name."

O'Neill whistled. "Wow. His mom really was a bitch."

"Mer, are you still there?" Jeanie asked.

McKay lifted his head from his hands. "Yeah, I'm still here. So's General O'Neill and Sheppard."

"Good," Jeanie said. "Put them on. I want to talk to them."

"Oh, uh…"

Sheppard stepped forward. "Hi, Jeanie. It's great to hear your voice. I'm glad Madison's going to be okay. I was really worried about her."

"That's really sweet," Jeanie said. "Thanks, John."

McKay rolled his eyes, and O'Neill thought he heard him mutter "Kirk".

"Where are you guys calling from?" Jeanie asked. "Mer never told me."

O'Neill leaned towards the phone. "My office, ma'am."

"Oh, you must be General O'Neill," Jeanie said.

O'Neill smiled. "Yes, ma'am. It's a pleasure to meet you, uh, phone-to-phone."

Jeanie laughed. "It's a pleasure to meet you too, General," she said. "I'm not exactly sure what's going on, but I appreciate you letting my brother use your phone."

O'Neill looked at McKay, who appeared to find the stapler on the desk absolutely fascinating. "It was no trouble, ma'am. I knew your brother was worried about his niece, and, hey, the trip to Earth gave me a good excuse to fly a puddle-jumper." He smirked at Sheppard then froze when he realized what he'd just said. "Uh, you know about puddle-jumpers, right?"

"Uh, yes," Jeanie said. "It's one of the first things I saw on-I'm sorry, but did you just say that you flew to Earth so my brother could call me?"

"Well, yes. I knew it was important, and coming to Earth to make a phone call seemed like the best solution."

There was silence on Jeanie's end until McKay spoke hesitantly into the phone's speaker. "Jeanie? Are you still there?"

"I can't believe you travelled all the way to Earth just so you could check on Madison," Jeanie said, sounding choked up.

McKay tilted his head, looking puzzled. "It didn't take long to get here. We used that intergalactic gate bridge I was telling you about."

"Mer, you called to check on Maddy. That's just about the nicest thing you've ever done." Jeanie sniffed loudly and blew her nose.

McKay grimaced, but his eyes were suspiciously shiny. "No, the nicest thing I've ever done was not to tell you that you were adopted."

Jeanie either ignored him, or his words didn't register, because the next thing she said was, "I'm going to get Madison."

"What?" McKay gasped. "No! She's sick. Shouldn't she be sleeping?"

Jeanie suddenly sounded tired again. "God, I wish. Last time I looked in on her, she was whacking her teddy bear against the wall."

"But--" McKay squeaked.

"I'll go get her," Jeanie said. She set the phone down, and the three men were treated to another long pause, made tenser by McKay's anxious fidgeting. Then a raspy little voice came through the phone's speaker.

"Hello?" it said. "Uncle Mer? I'm sick."

McKay was frowning at the phone in concern. "Yes, you certainly sound like it. Is your throat really sore?"

"Yes, but Mommy gave me antbotics." Madison coughed, and O'Neill was glad she couldn't see McKay wince at the sound. "Uncle Mer, are you going to give me a present? You have to give me a present because I'm sick. It's the rule."

McKay snorted. "Oh, it is, is it? Well, what do you want?"

Madison answered without hesitation. "I want a horse that changes colour, just like the one in The Wizard of Oz."

McKay stared at the phone in disbelief then shook his head. "How about a Barbie?"

"Okay," Madison said. "Could you get me a Let's Dance Princess Genevieve Barbie?"

McKay almost shuddered. "If I have to."

"It's the Barbie I want most in the whole world." Madison sounded so serious, that O'Neill had to bite his cheek to keep from laughing.

McKay sighed. "I'll have one sent to you, all right?"

"Yay!" Madison said. Then she started coughing again.

"Uh, maybe you should go back to bed," McKay suggested, once the coughing had subsided.

"Okay," Madison said. "Love you."

McKay gaped at the phone for a moment before he could get his jaws to work. "Oh, I…I love you too."

Madison giggled. "Bye, Uncle Mer."

"Bye, Madison." McKay continued to stare at the phone even after his niece had hung up. Then, remembering where he was, he blushed and cleared his throat. "Well, we should probably be getting back to Atlantis."

Sheppard was grinning. "But, Uncle Mer, what about the Let's Dance Princess Genevieve Barbie?"

McKay glared at him. "I'll ask someone to pick one up for me." He thought about it for an instant then snapped his fingers. "Bill. I'll get Bill to do it. He has kids, so he'll know where to look, and-and I can give him the latest World of Warcraft cheat codes in exchange."

"He probably already has them," O'Neill said, "though I'm sure he'd love an excuse to visit Toys 'R' Us, even without the cheat codes."

Sheppard pouted. "But I wanted to go to Toys 'R' Us."

McKay stared at Sheppard incredulously. "Why? To pick up a G.I. Joe?"

Sheppard crossed his arms. "No. As a matter of fact, I was going to get something for Madison."

"Oh. Well, that's very, uh…" McKay trailed off, looking sheepish.

Sheppard took pity on him. "Unfortunately, there's one significant drawback to my plan," he said. "I forgot to bring my wallet. I'm guessing you forgot yours too, Uncle Mer."

O'Neill smiled and shook his head. "I can't take you two anywhere." He reached into his back pocket and pulled out his own wallet. "You guys can pay me back, but we're grabbing something to eat first. I'm starving."

"Oh, me too," McKay said.

Sheppard rolled his eyes. "You're always hungry."

McKay shrugged. "Yeah? So?"

Sheppard shook his head. "I'm going to hit the restroom. I'll meet you at the elevators."

McKay rose from O'Neill's desk. "He probably just wants to check his hair."

O'Neill ran a hand through his own hair. "Well, some flyboys have to work harder at it than others."

That earned a startled laugh from McKay. "Yeah, I guess so." He stood in front of O'Neill, clasping his hands nervously. "Uh, I just wanted to thank you for, well, everything."

O'Neill grinned and slapped McKay on the back. "You're welcome, Rodney."


Part One


Date: 2007-11-11 07:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lavvyan.livejournal.com
Aww, this totally made my morning. *smiles stupidly*

Date: 2007-11-11 08:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! And you've totally made my morning (my very early morning) by saying that! :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 08:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lavvyan.livejournal.com
*laughs* I thought that maybe you hadn't gone to bed yet. ;)

Awesomecakes

Date: 2007-11-11 08:32 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] krysalys.livejournal.com
Excellent first go, m'dear. I like where you took this. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Awesomecakes

Date: 2007-11-11 08:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thanks, [livejournal.com profile] krysalys! I'm so glad you liked it and approved of the direction the story took! :-)

BTW I've never had anything referred to as being "awesomecakes," so thanks for another first! *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 08:39 am (UTC)
busaikko: animation of Rodney saying Yay (SGA yay)
From: [personal profile] busaikko
yay! *Rodney McKay seal of approval*

Date: 2007-11-11 08:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Omigod! I've always wanted the *Rodney McKay seal of approval*! Thank you! I'm so happy you enjoyed the story! :-)

Awesome icon BTW! :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 09:06 am (UTC)
busaikko: Rodney McKay having a brilliant idea (SGA Rodney voodoo)
From: [personal profile] busaikko
I felt rather cheeky handing that out, actually: but you did such a great job of taking some canon awkwardness and spinning it into gold (especially the dialogue!), that I figured Rodney wouldn't mind....

Your icon baffles me, by the way.

Date: 2007-11-11 08:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
I felt rather cheeky handing that out, actually: but you did such a great job of taking some canon awkwardness and spinning it into gold (especially the dialogue!), that I figured Rodney wouldn't mind....

Hey, I don't mind cheeky -- not when the *Rodney McKay seal of approval* is involved! Hopefully, Rodney won't mind too much. *g*

I'm touched by your very kind words about my story. Thank you very much. :-D

Your icon baffles me, by the way.

Oh, it's a reference to "Grace Under Pressure". You might remember Griffin asking McKay if he was Spanish during their exchange about the contributions Spain has made to science. McKay's sarcastic response was, "Yes, of the Barcelona McKays!" *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 09:08 pm (UTC)
busaikko: Something Wicked This Way Comes (SGA point)
From: [personal profile] busaikko
A-ha! (I haven't actually seen Grace Under Pressure yet... I will get there--eventually!)

Date: 2007-11-11 10:57 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] from-the-corner.livejournal.com
Very nice. :-)
I always thought that what Jack said in "Return" was mean, even if it was suppose to be a joke. Thanks for the fix-up :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 08:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Well, thank you! I'm glad you approve! :-) It's nice to know that I'm not the only one who thought Jack's "joke" was a little mean.

Date: 2007-11-11 11:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hesternic.livejournal.com
Hi, Rusty:

That was lovely! Your characterizations were spot-on!

I really liked the "Lacrosse" joke.

Date: 2007-11-11 08:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
And I was wondering whether I should send you the link! Looks like I don't have to now! *g*

I'm so happy you enjoyed it. I wasn't sure if you'd actually approve of my interpretation of Sheppard or not, so I'm glad you think I got the characterizations right. :-)

I couldn't resist throwing in that line about lacrosse, though it seemed a little cruel considering how much O'Neill likes hockey. *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 11:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poetryfiend.livejournal.com
Oh I *love* concerned-upset-and-a-little-moody-Rodney :P

Thanks for this :D It's so awesome :D:D

Date: 2007-11-11 09:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it! :-)

Rodney actually ended up being more concerned-upset-and-a-little-moody than I had originally anticipated, so it came as something of a surprise to me. I was afraid that people might find him a little too concerned-upset-and-a-little-moody, so it's great to know that this particular Rodney works for you!

Date: 2007-11-11 04:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] saffronhouse.livejournal.com
oh -- deeply satisfying. Thank you for posting.

Date: 2007-11-11 09:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, [livejournal.com profile] saffronhouse! :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 05:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lazy-8s.livejournal.com

Great story! Rodney is such a cute little woobie, worrying over Madison. I couldn't help but notice that John was not only not allowing Jack to fly his Jumper alone, but not fly with his scientist, as well. Contrary to what Rodney might say, he is not an idiot.

Date: 2007-11-11 09:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thanks, [livejournal.com profile] lazy_8s! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :-) I was actually worried that people might think that Rodney was too much of a woobie, so I'm glad that's something you liked. Oh, and great observation about Sheppard! He certainly isn't an idiot to want to fly the puddle-jumper or refuse to allow his scientist to travel anywhere without him! *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 05:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] greyias.livejournal.com
Aww, cuteness! Rodney worried over Maddie -- he's such a good Uncle Mer! *g* Jack visiting Sam in Atlantis "not checking up on her", was cute, and I enjoyed Ronon and Teyla's protectiveness over Rodney. Of course, it was really nice to see Jack try to pull the foot out of his mouth, and succeed at it. Guess he's got a good handle on stubborn geeks himself ;)

Date: 2007-11-11 09:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you for your generous comments! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! :-) I've been pleasantly surprised by the positive reaction I've had to Uncle Mer. And it's great that you enjoyed other aspects of the story. I'd also like to think that O'Neill's years of experience with the SGC (e.g. with Daniel) have given him some insight on how to deal with stubborn geeks! *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 06:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] verityduff.livejournal.com
Thank you for writing this. It's time someone showed Rodney some respect.

Date: 2007-11-11 09:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you agree! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment! I'm happy you enjoyed the story! :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 09:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] neichan22.livejournal.com
Perfect use of Rodney! From snarky and feelings hurt, to concerned and adorable uncle. wonderful. And hey, the flyboys did ok. too.

Date: 2007-11-11 09:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I'm so glad you approve of the Rodney characterization! :-) I wasn't sure if people would buy the transformation from snarky and hurt to concerned and adorable. However, McKay is such a deep and complex character that I'd like to think he's capable of a whole range of emotions -- all at once if need be. *g* Anywaaaaay, I'm happy you enjoyed the story.

Oh, and I agree with you about the flyboys. I think they did do okay. :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 09:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dr-dredd.livejournal.com
Very nice! Of course Rodney would be still be mourning for Carson and worried sick about Elizabeth. The antivenin incident would definitely be a last straw, especially given Maddy's illness. Cute reaction to the scarlet fever, too! :-)

Date: 2007-11-11 09:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm happy you enjoyed the story! :-) Yes, I'd like to think that Rodney is still mourning for Carson and worried about Elizabeth. I'm glad you liked his reaction to the scarlet fever incident. I had a lot of fun writing that last scene. *g*

Date: 2007-11-11 09:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dr-dredd.livejournal.com
I bet! And cute manip of David Hewlett in a sombrero, too...

Date: 2007-11-12 02:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladyniko.livejournal.com
This was well done. :)

I liked Rodney's mini-nervous breakdown here over Madison being sick and then, Shep & O'Neill fighting over who gets to fly the jumper back to Earth was cute.

Good work and I really enjoyed this.

Date: 2007-11-12 04:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I'm so happy you enjoyed the story! :-) I wasn't sure if people would think Rodney was over-reacting to Madison being sick, so I'm glad you liked his "mini-nervous breakdown". And, yes, I couldn't resist having Sheppard and O'Neill fighting over who got to fly the puddle-jumper. It just didn't seem possible for them not to! *g*

Date: 2007-11-12 04:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladyniko.livejournal.com
Rodney was overdue for a breakdown. He didn't really get whumped on from First Strike through Reunion - Radek did, Ronon did and of course, Elizabeth. John had his heart torn out when he couldn't rescue her and Rodney wasn't much better there either. So, of course he was due for a breakdown. :) He's Rodney after all. :)

Date: 2007-11-16 09:11 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] tazzles.livejournal.com
Awwwwwwwwww again. I'm tearing up here! The exchange between Jeannie and Rodney and then Rodney and Madison.......... *sniffles*
And John being all caring and O'Neill not being such a bunghole.
I feel kinda incoherent with how good I feel after reading this!

Superbly done!

Date: 2007-11-16 05:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
I'm almost tearing up myself thanks to your generous praise! :-D I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. I was afraid that faithful readers of "In the Family Way" might be angry that I posted a new fic instead of the next installment of my WIP! *g*

Anywaaaaay, it's wonderful to know that you were moved by the story and that it left you feeling good afterwards. I was hoping the fic would have that affect on people and I really can't ask for better feedback than that! :-D

Date: 2007-11-16 11:16 pm (UTC)
ext_970: (dean batman2)
From: [identity profile] tazzles.livejournal.com
I'm happy whenever you post any fic. You always write such lovely stories. Of course, I'd love an update of "In the Family Way" (I want John and Rodney to get back together and see what happens!), but stuff like this is just as good for me. I like it all!

Date: 2007-11-17 03:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Once again, you're being too kind! :-) Well, I'll definitely be posting another installment of "In the Family Way" soon, I hope. If "Thankless" helps tide you over (even a little) in the mean-time then I'm happy. :-)

BTW the Batman icon is still looking AWESOME!

Date: 2007-11-17 06:19 am (UTC)
ext_970: (dean brain freeze)
From: [identity profile] tazzles.livejournal.com
Thank you very much, High Priestess Enabler. Maybe I should make an icon.

Let't not forget, if you hadn't put me onto the gif cruncher, it wouldn't be here. So, thank you for helping to make it awesome!

And seriously, I always squee a little when I notice that you've posted a fic, because I always enjoy reading them.

Date: 2008-04-03 04:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] funkyinfishnet.livejournal.com
Hey! I love it, you totally get McKay right and it made me smile tons. Seeing things from O'Neill's perspective was a really good idea and I loved the interaction between Sheppard and McKay. Great job.

PS if you can't work out who this is, you're gonna be editing my Edward RoS fic soon xox

Date: 2008-04-03 04:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
LOL! Yes, I know who you are, though I kinda cheated because I read your email first and had a heads up. *g* I have to say...Wow! You're fast! Thank you for taking the time to read my fic! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :-) It's great that you think McKay sounded right and you liked the interaction between Sheppard and McKay. I always have a lot of fun writing scenes with those two!

I'm looking forward to reading Soothing (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4095872/1/Soothing)! Thanks again for sending me the link! :-)

Date: 2008-07-28 12:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] astrochelonian.livejournal.com
That was great! I enjoyed Jack and Sam's banter, Zelenka's revenge, Jack being so in-character (No, I was spying on him), and the conversation between Jack, John & McKay. This was very funny and cute.

Date: 2008-07-28 03:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you very much, [livejournal.com profile] astrochelonian! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :-) It's good to know that Jack and Sam's banter worked for you and Jack sounded in-character. To be honest, I'm not as familiar with SG-1 as SGA, so one of my concerns was whether Jack would sound right.

I'm glad you got a kick out of Zelenka's revenge, which was an idea that basically just popped into my head as I was writing that scene. I really enjoyed writing that conversation between Jack, John & McKay. They're all fun characters to work with.

Thankless

Date: 2008-08-27 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] miscbills.livejournal.com
I love this fic! It going on my favorites list. You're right about O'Neill being dispectfull toward McKay. Afterward he was a risking alot for him and Woolsey. Your story made up for that. It was so cute of Rodney sitting behind O'Neill's desk to talk to Madison and agreeing to the rule of buying her a gift because she was sick.

Re: Thankless

Date: 2008-08-28 03:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! I'm thrilled that you're going to add my fic to your favourites list! :-) It's great to find someone else who thinks O'Neill was being disrespectful to McKay. I'm glad you like the scene where Rodney talks to Madison on the phone. I had a lot of fun writing that. *g*

Date: 2008-11-28 07:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] margarks.livejournal.com
aww! i love the rodney was worried about madison and I especially love that she drew him a brontasoraus (sp?) and that he had it up on his desk! CUTE! And, it always makes my day when the team is protective of Rodney (especially ronon!) :)

Date: 2008-11-28 04:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Hey, [livejournal.com profile] margarks! Thanks the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :-) Like you, I'm a sucker for fic in which the team is protective of Rodney, so that's probably why that creeped into this story. I also like to think that Rodney loves his niece a lot (even if he tries to cover it up) and would be worried if he found out she was sick. Oh, and when I was about Madison's age, I had a fondness for painting brontosauruses, so that's something that was inspired by real life. *g*

Date: 2008-12-01 08:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] outsideth3box.livejournal.com
Just re-read. Again. How much do I love this story? Let me count the ways:

TEAM! (this includes subheadings)

Teyla's subtle warning to O'Neill
Ronon: "didn't sound like a joke to me."
Sheppard: "If something's wrong you tell me!"

O'Neill discovering that his smartass "jokes" aren't all that funny.

More TEAM!

O'Neill's surprise when Jeannie asks if Rodney is on Earth.

Madison telling Unca Mer that he has to bring her a present because she's sick. It's a rule.

*Luffs this story*

Date: 2008-12-01 04:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rusty-armour.livejournal.com
Thank you very very much for your generous comments! I'm thrilled that you decided to re-read this story and list the reasons why you enjoy it! :-D

I think feedback always means a lot more to writers when readers give specific examples of why a story worked for them. Like you, I also enjoy fic with TEAM! moments, so that might be why some of the things you mentioned appeared in this story. I'm also a big fan of Jeannie, so I couldn't resist finding an opportunity to include her and Madison. :-)

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